Just another day - (mildly disturbing imagery)

[Cj]

Sorry I dont know ratings and you guys probably wont find any of this disturbing but i suppose it could be classed that way

I'm not leaving this post up indefinitely, if its not permanent it means i'll be more inclined to change it and its still not perfect

so i'll give it a week or so and take it down

feel free to point out anything wrong. i'm not happy with some of my tenses i'm not good at those things or if you guys think its too cliched or boring just let me know

setting, well i hope you can read slightly out of context. thats usually my favourite cos then your imagination runs wild, but this is end of chap 3 to a cyberpunk novel set in an alternate universe you've met Sueiva before in false hope this is her after she has got that job she was being offered. she's pissed some people off.

okay enough ranting lets go....

p.s sorry Amy i'm about to double post, but you love me really!

[Jac]

Hey, there's a lot of promise there! I'd certainly be interested in reading more. In all honesty I'd say a little editing wouldn't go amiss but I like the premise. I'm intrigued by the situation. I actually care what happens to the character...

Just one thing. Blood isn't crimson when it's on the floor. It's dark red, almost black.

J

[Cj]

cheers!

thank you for reading it

[GrimmRiffer]

Shot? How?

Blimey, this is serious. Guess there's some real institutional prejudice in this place if anyone would even think of doing that!

[Cj]

oh yah, everyone hates her cos people like her used to run the shop and hate people like them

(does dat make sense?) i think u get me!

i'm waiting for someone to pick up on something but i'll wait a while longer, maybe i just think its unusual......

Thanks for reading GR (p.s finally caught up to answering your posts from my other threads sorry for the lateness!)